For this activity, I chose clustering over cubing. This was because I initially didn't know what topics I wanted to do my genre translation project on, which made it hard to complete the cubing exercise successfully. I started clustering by first looking at the possible ideas I wanted to explore further. The first topic I came up with was bioluminescence in deep sea fish. Since I enjoy biology and science in general, I thought that this would be a good possible topic. I then found a scholarly article discussing the causes and effects of the bioluminescence, which I categorized as the biological components and the effects on the ocean's ecosystem. The second topic I thought of was the effects that music can have on the brain. Once again, I searched for a scholarly article and found one that discussed the various effects that music can have, along with the potentials of music therapy. The next step I took was thinking of the possible types of genres I could translate the ar...
Hi Aliyah! It was such a pleasure reading your Self-Study. I feel like I really got to know parts of who you are, especially as a student, based on the specificity of the details you included. You talked about personal details like how phone usage has affected your sleep schedule, what you tend to spend your online time doing, etc. You made a point to focus on many of the same ideas that I found I focused on in my paper as well. I can honestly say that as I read through your paper, at certain points where I would notice that you presented an idea similar to mine, I would think to myself “wow, I did something just like this,” like when you included the descriptive analysis of your ScreenTime data. Your writing is very strong and clear. You effectively use your sources to support the ideas you’ve presented and in a very personal way. You have a strong thesis statement that sets up the rest of your paper very nicely. The only suggestion, really, that I would make is to consider rearranging a couple of your source integrations based on the evidence that was presented in that particular area. My reasons for having made these suggestions is merely that one could be misled in the mentioning of multiple sources in one place. I understand if that part in my comments is confusing and I apologize; specifically, you use David Roberts’ source to guide the reader towards what Linda Stone mentions in her article, even though you had already mentioned Roberts earlier in your paper. I enjoyed reading your work so much. It was so cool to read the ideas, the things that you had to say, and compare them to the ideas that I presented as well in how they were so similar. Your piece is so interesting, relatable, and you convey it in such a way that it's so engaging! Awesome work! :)
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